Thread: Bored and looking for feedback

W.I.P. song by me. comments?

*Ignis Fatuus:

Dazed and dumb, dedication suites me.
Paralyzed in this perfect process.

One fault.
One shame.
One resolve.

Lift not this burden from my conscience.

My reflection is hollow.
This glass is cursed.
A thousand times I've sang this verse.
Redemption awaits the other side,
But in this room my soul resides.

Faceless fools, full of fear and fatuity.
Most have missed the emotion with in.

Doubt my indiscretions now.
What you percieve is merely man.
I cant undo what I've not done.
Illusion then, my only option.

This mockery continues.
Blame yourself.







*Intellectual property of Pat Young (Bob_Bobber0), all rights reserved. ? Copyright 2009.

That was actually pretty good mate.

I didn't have a rythm to follow though, but I liked it.

Maniche

Nice job* .

What music genre will it be put to?

It will sound something like Tool. They are the biggest influence here.

Tool! I think we will become good friends then*
I like the lyrics, looking forward to hear what the song is like.

Heres a Tool cover I did, if anyone is interested. Stinkfist.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oDqVI6zl_aU#lq-lq2-hq

That`s not half bad m8ty.Keep at it ;D

heh, it helps if you are familiar with tool, then you can really hear and appreciate the greatness. Lol

Should be recording it with some legit stuff tonight. full version as well.

Originally Posted by Bob_Bobber0

heh, it helps if you are familiar with tool, then you can really hear and appreciate the greatness. Lol

Should be recording it with some legit stuff tonight. full version as well.

Lol..I`m familiar with Queen,Def Leppard,Thin Lizzy & a few more of that era.
The only Tools I know of are the idiots I`ve worked with for the last 30 years

it may be beneficial to become familiar with them, they are possibly one of the single greatest bands around right now. Beautifully crafted music laced with brilliant lyrics.